Dear Professor Brad,
I would like to take this
opportunity to introduce myself. My name is Moe Wai Yan Tun, but you can call
me Wai Yan. I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic with a diploma in civil
engineering with business in 2017. I chose to study civil engineering in
polytechnic because my parents encouraged me to. However, I have grown my
interest in it while studying in Singapore Polytechnic and decided to further
my studies.
A communication strength
I possess will be the ability to make a conversation interesting. My love for
telling jokes and stories over the years had made me develop a habit to make
the conversations captivating. However, I strongly believe that I still have
room for improvement.
In my opinion, I have a
weakness in the ability to initiate a conversation with a stranger. Whenever I
am at a party or an event, I find myself interacting with the people that I
have known before. I am not a shy person, but I lack the communication
techniques and skills to strike a conversation with a stranger.
First goal I have for
this module is learning to communicate better through my writing. I would like
to improve my ability to write well such as using appropriate grammar and
sentence structure. I believe by achieving the first goal I will be equipped
with the skills to write well when I embark on my engineering career in the
future.
Today with technology and
social media where the news spread faster than we can blink, I believe that the
ability to analyze and interpret the news are is essential. Therefore, another
goal I have for this module is learning the required skills to identify and
understand the truth when I am being exposed to the news.
Kind regards,
Wai YanCommented on:
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Dear Wai Yan,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your introduction letter. It is well written and informative. However, I feel that you did not really elaborate on why you are interested in civil engineering. Perhaps you can explain what made interested in civil engineering.
Having talked to you in class and i have to admit that you do have the ability to make a conversation interesting. You are capable of articulating your thoughts regarding the topic very well.
Cheers,
Justin
Dear Justin,
DeleteThank you for your kind comment. I will make necessary edits to include the reasons that made me want to studies Civil Engineering. I look forward to more comments from you in the future.
Cheers,
Wai Yan
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ReplyDeleteDear Wai Yan,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this clear, concise and well-developed letter. You address all the touchpoints of the assignment and you provide clear specific detail. In terms of the comm skills weakness and strength, this is especially true, and it resonates in your module goals as well.
However, what I would also appreciate is learning about how your interest in engineering developed, and how you ended up studying in Singapore. To take this letter a notch up in level, you might thread your motivation for studying engineering and your experience in coming to Singapore together.
I do appreciate the fluency of this letter, and I wonder how that came about for a kid from Myanmar. Care to share? That really would show how you are special.
I look forward to learning more about you this term.
Cheers,
Brad
Dear Professor Brad,
DeleteThank you for your thoughtful comment. The reason I did not elaborate on my letter was that I did not want to exceed the word limit of the assignment. My love for English movies and books since I was young might have helped me with the language. I will make the necessary edits to my letter to make it more compelling.
I sincerely appreciate your comment and look forward to more comments in the future.
With appreciation,
Wai Yan
Thanks for the effort, WaiYan.
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